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Post by germanempire on Mar 16, 2018 7:56:07 GMT
A.B. 5 IN THE ASSEMBLY OF ALL
March 16th, 2018
The German Empire of Prussia introduced the following bill to the Assembly for debate.
A BILL
Formally establishing the Mentor Program for New Nations and Nations with Language or Experience deficite , in order to ensure growth and prosperity pf the region.
Be it enacted by the Assembly of All and Parliament of Londinium in the legislature assembled.
Introduction of the Londinium Mentor Program for New Nations and Nations with Language or Experience deficite (LMP-NN-NLE)
Article #1: The newly introduced program will feature means to further the developement of all citizens residing in the Region Londinium. Therefore the Mentor Program will be obeying command of the Minister of Development who will designate a Head-Mentor to act in their place (rights of the HM see Art. #2).
Article #2: Acknowledging the Supremacy of the Minister of Developement, the Head-Mentor will posses no regional Officer powers. The Head-Mentor will have the ability to open and close mentor threads, which are occupied by a Mentor, in the offside forum as they see fit.
Article #3: Mentors are defined as either:
¤ Veteran citizens with at least 1-2 months of regional residence , depending on their abilities , designed to act as guidance for New nations that are troubled with NS, Government or Discord related situations or rules.
¤ Citizens that know a second language, other than english to act as a help to mitigate the language deficite, further the inclusion and assimilation of new nations or nations with language or experience deficite.
Article #3.1: All Citizens that are designated as either 'Mentors' or 'Head-Mentor' will not recieve Officer powers in either the region Londinium or the offside forum, but limited powers to manage their chanels (created in Art. #4) on the Londinium main Discord server.
Article #4: Seeing the possibility of easying the way to communicate through means of outside resources, such as the Main Regional Londinium Discord Server, the Head of the LMP-NN-NLE will be granted to hold Mentor booths within a specificly designated part of the Main Regional Londinium Discord Server that must be provided for the program by the Server Administration.
Article #4.1: All threads or Mentor booths created will obey the law of Londinium and/or the rules of the Main Regional Londinium Discord Server that happen to be in place in the time of passing of this bill.
Article #5: The Minister of Development rules supreme over all desicions made by the Head-Mentor. If either the Head-Mentor, a Mentor or a mentored nation break the rules or the law of Londinium or the Main Regional Londinium Discord Server, charges may be pressed, regardless of a ruling made by the Minister of Development. A closing of either the Mentor threads , the Mentor booths or the LMP-NN-NLE itself are strictly prohibited by this bill and can only be made by the Monarch.
Article #5.1: Closure of the LMP-NN-NLE by the Monarch may only occure in the circumstances of proven indoctrination of NN-NLE by the Minister of Development or Head-Mentor. This closure will not be permanent and will be lifted / reversed if either the alligations are proven false or the Head-Mentor is changed.
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Post by germanempire on Mar 16, 2018 7:56:56 GMT
I introduce this Formally to debate.
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Post by Bymaria on Mar 16, 2018 21:19:09 GMT
I would like to thank the Honourable Member of Parliament for submitting this bill. I’ve read over it and I believe the following needs changed.
Firstly: German Title? Not a fan if it’s official policy and the rest is English. Sorry. I’d hear others thoughts on this too if it is only me. -_- In the bill caption, “pf” needs to be edited to “of” - I too have had my experience with accidentally misspelling words on my phone keyboard. ;-) There is a hing below the enacting clause which I’m not sure belongs there. Next I personally am not so fond of the NN-NLE abbreviations. I think the LMP is fine, but not sure if it is all necessary. I’m not sure about saying “experience deficit”, as “inexperienced” seems so much easier. But if we are going with that it should be corrected to “deficit”. There’s a rogue capital letter in Article 3 and in Article 4 “easying” should be replaced with “easing”. In Article 3.1 “offside” should be changed to “off-site”. I don’t think it is needed too to say they won’t receive forum powers. Looking over articles one and two they seem a little vague for being two separate things. I think it would be possible for them to be combined into a single article on establishment. A lot of things in this thread might be added into it (there was an application among other things, which would be good). In Article 3 the definitions need fixing to show that mentors are those appointed as part of the program and that that is qualifying criteria for appointment. Article 4.1 and Article 5.I do not think are required, as everyone is already accountable to the law and much of what is said is mentioned earlier. If there is extra information there about the Head Mentor that you think is requisite maybe put it along with the other stuff about the position.
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Post by Bymaria on Mar 16, 2018 21:47:13 GMT
I like that there is considerable freedom over the programme and the heads can create threads on various things throughout the mentoring as they see fit to make things interesting and introduce as well as socialise with other people.
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Post by germanempire on Mar 16, 2018 22:12:57 GMT
I'd Like to thank you for the critic and will see what I can implement into the Bill and keep it as I intended it to be at the same time and the grammaticly errors may be changed as well.
Also, the title of this thread is in german because I wrote this in the morning and "forgot how to english". ^^
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Post by United Barbaros on Mar 21, 2018 21:00:17 GMT
What is the status of this bill thus far?
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Post by Nyelant on Mar 22, 2018 0:01:12 GMT
I could maybe edit it to fix some spelling errors if GE wants.
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Post by germanempire on Mar 23, 2018 6:32:58 GMT
I would be happy about help with gramatical errors that occoured and I failed to find Nyelant . The Status of the Bill is currently in development and i would suggest a bit more discussion or critic to be issued in case anybody wants to do so before the times is over^^.
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Post by United Barbaros on Mar 25, 2018 4:20:26 GMT
Has the bill been edited?
And are there any more thoughts or comments for this bill?
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Post by Nyelant on Mar 25, 2018 13:17:30 GMT
I'll fix the grammar and stuff now.
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Post by Nyelant on Mar 25, 2018 13:34:48 GMT
A.B.5 IN THE ASSEMBLY OF ALL
March 16th, 2018
The German Empire of Prussia introduced the following bill to the Assembly for debate.
A BILL
Formally establishing the Mentor Programme for New Nations and Nations with Language or Experience Deficit, in order to ensure growth and prosperity of the region.
Be it enacted by the Assembly of All and Parliament of Londinium in the legislature assembled.
Introduction of the Londinium Mentor Program for New Nations and Nations with Language or Experience Deficit (LMP-NN-NLE)
Article #1: The newly introduced program will feature means to further the development of all citizens residing in the region of Londinium. The Mentor Program will be under the command of the Minister of Development who will designate a Head-Mentor to act in their place, this right being afforded to him by Rights of the HM see Art. #2.
Article #2: Acknowledging the Supremacy of the Minister of Development, the Head-Mentor will possess no Regional Officer powers. The Head-Mentor will have the ability to open and close mentor threads, which are in turn overseen by other mentors in the offsite forum.
Article #3: Mentors are defined as either:
¤ Veteran citizens with at least 1-2 months of regional residence , depending on their abilities , designed to act as guidance for New nations that are troubled with NS, Government or Discord related situations or rules.
¤ Citizens that know a second language, other than English to act as a help to mitigate the language deficit, further the inclusion and assimilation of new nations or nations with language or experience deficit.
Article #3.1: All Citizens that are designated as either 'Mentors' or 'Head-Mentor' will not receive Officer powers in either the region of Londinium or the offsite forum, but will have limited powers to manage their channels (see Art. #4) on the Londinium main Discord server.
Article #4: Seeing the possibility of easing means of communication through means of outside resources, such as the main regional Londinium Discord server, the Head of the LMP-NN-NLE will be granted to hold Mentor booths within a specifically designated part of the main regional Londinium Discord server that must be provided for the program by the server administration.
Article #4.1: All threads or mentor booths created are subject to the laws of Londinium and the rules of the main regional Londinium Discord server that happen to be in place in the time of passing of this bill.
Article #5: The Minister of Development rules supreme over all decisions made by the Head-Mentor. If either the Head-Mentor, a Mentor or a mentored nation break the laws of Londinium or the main regional Londinium Discord server, charges may be pressed, regardless of a ruling made by the Minister of Development. A closing of either the mentor threads, the mentor booths or the LMP-NN-NLE itself are strictly prohibited by this bill and can only be made by the Monarch.
Article #5.1: Closure of the LMP-NN-NLE by the Monarch may only occur in the circumstances of proven indoctrination of NN-NLE by the Minister of Development or Head-Mentor. This closure will not be permanent and will be lifted / reversed if either the allegations are proven false or the Head-Mentor is changed.
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Post by hromos on Apr 1, 2018 17:55:08 GMT
Typo in article 2: "posses" Typo in Article 3.1: "recieve"
The beginnings of articles 2 and 5 seem redundant, with the second mention in article 5 not exactly tying into the theme of 5. I would suggest possibly taking the first sentence of 5 and inserting it into article 2.
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Post by Nesearan on Jun 30, 2018 9:54:58 GMT
Anyone want to add in something?
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Post by hromos on Jul 1, 2018 21:41:18 GMT
Do we still have the positions that this bill lists? We may need to reformat it for the new constitution.
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Post by Fortwhile on Jul 7, 2018 19:49:26 GMT
Yeah we should definitely make this happen!
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